Gimme Some Color
A lonely cactus finds himself as the outcast in his hometown. He lives a very lonely and dull life. In this story, you will see how he becomes more than bland.
The Innocent Murderer
My mother always told me to never talk to strangers. She was right.
The unFOURgettables
A small wager can have a big price!
A Parent's Nightmare
It can pay off to listen to your parents the first time.
A lonely cactus finds himself as the outcast in his hometown. He lives a very lonely and dull life. In this story, you will see how he becomes more than bland.
The Innocent Murderer
My mother always told me to never talk to strangers. She was right.
The unFOURgettables
A small wager can have a big price!
A Parent's Nightmare
It can pay off to listen to your parents the first time.
For your portfolio I read the storytelling post from week five, an innocent murderer. I really like your creative twists on your story! I read your story first and then your authors note and then grazed through your story again and I think you did a great job of accomplishing the changes you set out to make. Changing the story to all animals didn’t take away from the message at all and may have even made the message even more clear to the readers. The original story with an animal and human crossover may have been a bit more confusing it that concept had come up in modern story telling. I think your way of establishing your characters and not rushing into the story was another really good decision so it lets the readers connect with your characters and get entwined with your story and follow your decisions more closely.
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